Work In Progress Wednesday

[tjs_whatnot]

So, I thought this might be a fun way for me to be here with you all on a weekly basis. Every Wednesday, come and share a bit of what you're working on, whether it be fic, craft, art, meta or anything in between. It doesn't have to be fandom-related. But, if it's for a anonymous fest and your stuff is to be secret, then maybe don't share that? You could share any struggles, achievements and whatnot though.

Feel free to read other people's entries (if anyone else does this that is) and cheer/commiserate/bemoan with them.

Comments

[tjs_whatnot]

Welcome!

AHHHHHHH, this is so great! I love Riker and I love, love that last line!

IF you really want concrit, there was only one thing that I thought needed something added. IT's this line:

Empty metal box, probably in space.

Why probably? Does he feel movement like he's on a ship? Does he hear engines? What makes him think space is probable?

Totally easy to fix, or you could just leave it and maybe it's just me.

I definitely can't wait to read more!

♥

[sixbeforelunch]

Thank you! :) I just finished last night, so hopefully it will be posted soon.

The "probably" refers back to some stuff a few paragraphs before this snippet (this is about halfway through the first scene) but you're absolutely right that it's a bit strange out of context. Hopefully it's more appropriate in context.

[tjs_whatnot]

Ahhhh, of course, that totally makes sense.

♥

Excellent!