Work in Progress Wednesday!

[tjs_whatnot]

Sorry I'm late. I keep getting distracted. Story of my life really.

I have been busy with things, but nothing really WiP Wednesday worthy, what about you? What do you got?

Share your work, then come back to cheer on the others. It only really works if you do both parts.

♥

Comments

[silveradept]

From the only WIP that currently exists (other things have been posted as complete works since the last thing).

Someone is about to have their ass handed to them on a platter:

There! The pattern on the brick distorted just slightly. Rena leapt for the space to strike it with her flute. Volpina shimmered into view as she dodged the hit, swinging her own weapon as an attempt to catch Rena off-guard.

Rena parried the strike easily and punched Volpina in the nose with her other hand. Volpina reeled before swinging back with her own fist. Rena ducked and delivered another hit to Volpina's body. Growing up with a kickboxer for a sister had its advantages when you could get close enough to use it, she thought, delivering an elbow to Volpina's nose and following it with a solid flute strike.

Volpina jumped back out of range, snarling. Rena smiled as she saw the blood dripping from Volpina's nose.

"You're a mess, girl," Rena taunted. "But if you want more, there's plenty to be had."

Volpina rushed in again, bringing her weapon up over her head to strike. Rena stopped Volpina's advance by stabbing her between the lungs with her own weapon, before kneeing her in the face and delivering Nora's signature uppercut immediately afterward while Volpina was still gasping for air.

"Don't give up on me yet," Rena shouted at her laid-out opponent. "There's still a lot more you have to answer for."

[tielan]

Ooh. Sounds like there's some serious bad blood there. Interesting snippet!

One thing: stabbing her between the lungs sounds odd. Is there a reason that she's not stabbing her between the breasts? Or stabbing her in the chest? Or the solar plexus?

[silveradept]

The solar plexus is what she's getting and asking for. That part might get revised later on if I think about it and decide the character knows about it. Having a kickboxer for a sister makes it much more likely.

I wasn't completely sure the audience would know, either, but that's what search engines are for, I guess?

[marzipan77]

FIGHT! I love it!

[silveradept]

Thanks. Previous battles in this series have been less dirty and not generally humans bloodying other humans, but I wanted this one to feel gritty and a lot less elegant, so I hope that came across.

[cornerofmadness]

Great action scene.

[silveradept]

Thanks!